GUANG DONG JIAO YU GAO ZHONG
读后续写的三个基本步骤
■广东省汕头市教育局教研室张秋红
广东省油头市潮阳实验学校杨燕
下面通过例题说明，我们在做读后续写时应遵循的三个 基本步骤。
秘密的反义词阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Every S u n d a y,G r a n d m a and I walked to the Children’s h o m e a few blocks awa y from our house.G r a n d m a always brings a h o m e-m a d e cake to these children,w h o are of different nationali­ties and ages.S o m e are refugees ()®K)w h o cannot talk in E n g­lish,s o m e are even disabled.
First w e visit John,w h o is from Brazil.I call him4t Football genius”.H e plays football so well that he organized a football team to help other kids develop football skills,such as passing and ball control.Every time w e reached the playground,w e s aw    a group of sweaty kids running around a field with bright smiles.
Next w e visit Daisy.I call her“T h e singer”because she has a great gift for singing.Sh e loves to sing songs for us.Wherever she stays,her soft and sweet voice f i l l s the air.
T h e n w e visit David.I call h i m“Prince (王子）Joke”.H e can do talk s h o w，crosstalk (相声），tell jokes.Sometimes he laughs loudly while telling jokes,w e could see his legs shaking up and d o w n,his face turning red.G r a n d m a and I can*t help laugh­ing along with h i m.
O n e day,G r a n d m a fell i l l and had to stay in b e d.Sh e was in a low spirit and couldn’t m o v e.
Sunday c a m e.G r a n d m a put m y hand into her hand and told m e“Rose given,fragrance (芳香）in h a n d.”I understood what she meant,I bought a cake from shop and went to children’s h o m e.Everyone was happy to see m e.T h e y were disappointed w h e n they didn't see g r a n d m a.K n o w i n g g r a ndma was sick,they were sad.The y prayed together for grandma*s recovery.After    a while,I said goodbye to everyone.
A w e e k later,g r a ndma w as s t i l l lying in b ed.She could not walk or speak,what she could do was drink s ome milk.I begged her to go to hospital.S he shook her h e a d.I hid myself under the big tree in our yard so G r a n d m a wouldn*t see tears on m y cheeks.
注意：
1. 续写词数应为150左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Suddenly,the door bell rang.
That evening,g r a ndma called m e in her b e d r o o m.
一、阅读所给材料，理清故事要点
仔细阅读所给故事材料，搞清楚故事的主要人物（w h o)、时间（w h e n)、地点（where)、事件（what)，原因（w h y)，及如 何发展（h o w)。即五个W和1个h o w，也就是记叙文的六要 素。如上述题目所给材料的六要素是：
w h o篮球比赛中的盖帽蚂蚁庄园
人物
(角）
G r a n d m a
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John(Football Geni u s)
Daisy(Singer)
David(Prince Joke)
w h e n时间Every Sunday
where地点
Children’s h o m e
G r a n d m a’s bedroom
what事件G r a n d m a was i l l seriously
w h y原因
G r a n d m a always visited Children's h o m e and
brought cake for kids.
h o w怎么
G r a n d m a's grandson visited Children^h o m e
and shared the bad n e w s with children.
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&考英语胜经
文章的大意就是作者的奶奶很有爱心，经常看望福利院
的孩子们，了解孩子们的爱好特长。一天奶奶生病了，依旧
牵挂着孩子们，让作者去探望孩子们。作者把奶奶生病的消
息告诉给了福利院的孩子。奶奶的病情加重，还丧失了信心，
不肯去医院。作者焦虑万分。
二、 捕捉首句信息，构思续写情节
1.理解 paragraph 1 所给句：Suddenly,the door bell rang (突然，门铃响了).
前文结尾，奶奶病重，情绪低落，拒不就医，由首句中
的S u d d e n l y可知，有了转机。可以bell ring为突破口，运用
记叙文的六要素构思情节：
门铃响了，是谁来看望奶奶来了？带着这个问题，读者
来构思第一个续写段落。
谁（w h o)来看望奶奶？带来了什么（what)?为什么（w h y)
要来探望？如何（h o w)进行探望的？奶奶的感受如何（h o w)?
根据这一系列的问题，迅速构思情节并组织语言。
2.理解续写的Paragraph 2 首句：That evening，g r andma called m e i n丨ier b e d room (那天晚上，奶奶把我叫到她的卧室).
思考：奶奶叫我进来做什么，先在头脑中构思各种可能性：
(1)G r a n d m a wants to go to hospital.
(2)G r a n d m a was hungry,she needs to eat something.
(3)G r a n d m a wants to go to Children’s h o m e.
三、 根据构思情节，考虑语言表达
1. 苍白的脸上浮现出困惑的表情。
A confused look appeared on her pale face.
2. 脸上露出了满足的微笑。
A satisfied smile flashed on her face.
3. 眼里闪现着喜悦的光芒。
H e r eyes were shining with joy.
4. 一个声音回响在他的脑海里。
A voice echoed/'e k s u/in her m i n d.
5. 孩子们的微笑闪现在她的脑海里。
Children*s smiles flashed through her m i n d.
6. —个用水果装饰的好看的心形蛋糕
a nice-looking cake decorated with fruits in the shape of heart
7. —张彩鲜艳的照片
a bright-colored picture
蛋糕店品牌8. —大碗粥
a big bowl of porridge
9. 她挣扎着站起来。
S he struggle to her feet.
10. 聚集起她所有的体力
gather all her strength
11. 忍住眼泪
hold back tears
12. 睁开她的眼睛坐起来
opened her eyes and sat up 13. 喝了一大碗粥，尝了一小块蛋糕千金剧情介绍
drank a big bowl of porridge and tasted a bit of cake
14. 打开录音机
switched on the recorder
15. 把录音机和照片抱在她的怀里
hugged the recorder a nd picture into her arms
16. 轻轻地，她告诉我她第二天要去医院。
Gently,she told m e she would go to hospital the next day.
17. 很明显，她渴望尽快恢复，以便去看望那些可爱的孩
子。
Evidently,she was eager to recover soon to visit the lovely
kids .
黄菡个人资料18. 内心充满喜悦
overwhelmed/jOUv^r'w e l m/by enormous joy
19. 奔向他的怀抱
throw herself into his arms
蛋糕事件
20. 泪眼朦胧中，他们拥抱到一起。
With teary eyes,they hugged together.
21. 无法隐藏他的激动
can*t conceal/k a n's i i l/his excitement
22. 迫不及待地跟她分享喜悦的消息
c a n’t wait to share the exciting new s with her
23. 喜悦的泪水冲出了她的眼眶
happy tears welled up in her eyes
在考虑好语言表达之后，就连句成篇，然后仔细检査；
准备无误后，认真誊写，并注意书写规范，字迹整洁。
参考范文
Suddenly,the door bell rang.G r a n d m a opened her eyes and
sat u p.A confused look appeared on her pale face.Suddenly,a
loud laughter c a m e into m y ears.“It’s David，the Joke Prince.”
I shouted.“W e miss y ou.”David rushed to g r andma with    a
delicate cake in his hands.I t was a nice-looking cake decorated
with fruits in the shape of heart.“T he cake i s m a d e by all
children in the nursery h o m e.”David said and switched on the
recorder,a sweet voice filled the air.I t was a song sung by Daisy.
Magically,he took out a picture.In the picture,g r a ndma was
watching John*s football team playing football.
That evening,grandma called nie in her bedroom.She said
she was hungry.She drank a big bowl of porridge and tasted a bit
of cake.A satisfied smile flashed on her face.H e r eyes were
shining with joy.With tears in her eyes,she hugged the recorder
and picture into her arm s.S he told m e she would go to hospital
the next d ay.Sh e was eager to recover soon to visit the lovely
kids. “W h a t a magic visit!”I whispered.Nothing i s more fantas­
tic than being needed and valued.
责任编辑蒋小青30 广东教育•高中2021年第5期