作文范文之阿甘正传英语作文
阿甘正传英语作文
【篇一：英语写作指导及范文】
1. a film review
写作指导
写作任务:
词数: 100左右
分析:
黄有龙简历本次写作任务是写一篇电影评论。影评一般包括三方面内容:电影背景介绍,电影内容简介和评论。其中电影评论是写作的重点。在对某部电影评论之前,作者要明确读者熟悉所评论的电影,至少应该有所了解。因此对影片的背景介绍能使读者对电影有一个大致了解,一般包括对影片的故事背景、演职人员和获奖情况的介绍。影片内容回顾能使没有观赏过影片的观众了解剧情,为下文的影评做好准备。影片内容回顾要简明扼要,切忌拖沓冗长,但也要清楚交待故事的进展情况,尤其是与影评相关的细节。这一部分一般不加入个人的主观评价,只需要客观陈述故事内容即可。评论部分是影评的重点,可以从剧情的编排、演员的表演或者观后感悟等方面进行评价和论述。对高中生而言,我们只需要针对其中的某一点进行深入评论即可,不用面面俱到。需要注意的是,尽管作者可以放开思路进行评论,但始终不能背离所介绍的电影。影评写作一般用现在时态。
初稿:
forrest gump is my favorite movie which i have seen almost five times. on the one hand, i’m really moved by the real life of american people that time, on the other hand, by the confidence and courage taught by gump’s mother. she would sacrific
e anything to make her son understand the meaning of life and make him believe he is like everyone else. just like mum said: life was like a box of chocolates; you never know what you’re gonna get. so that is why he always did everything seriously from his deep heart. stupid is as stupid does. i think maybe we should be stupid sometimes in our real life now. life is a gift and we should not waste it.
植物大战僵尸无尽模式最佳阵容>张震大婚 教师点评:
这篇初稿不惜笔墨大谈电影观后感和收获,但是忽略了对电影内容的介绍,这是一个较大的失误。尽管《阿甘正传》是一部家喻户晓的电影,但仍应在文章开头对影片进行简单介绍。
其次,在个人感想上,作者的思维比较混乱。虽然涉及到了很多方面,但是都不够深入。可以就电影感人的原因和观后启发深入探讨。另外,在表达方式上,文章还需要从以下几个方面进行改进:
1. 短语用法错误:on the other hand意思是另一方面,在英文中,另一方面必须和一方面所说的意思相反,建议改为:not only ... but also ... 。
2. 连词用法错误:just like mum said: ... so that is why he always did ... so在英语中往往表示因果关系。仔细推敲这两句话,并不能由前句得出后句的结果,建议将so ...句改为gump does everything seriously with the belief that he could do the best as long as he makes effort.
下面我们来看修改后的成稿。
成稿:
the film forrest gump is about a person with a learning disability who is also unluckily born with a serious back problem. most people think that people like forrest can never succeed in anything, but this unlucky man achieved more than most people. he became a football star, a war hero, and a millionaire, and he did many other amazing things. i’m deeply impressed by gump’s
attitude toward life. he pays little attention to what people think of him. instead, bearing the motto stupid is as stupid does in his heart, he always tries his best to p
气体ursue his own dream. he has taught me that i should never give up on my dreams, even when life gets very hard.
教师点评:
中国四大发明 文章涵盖了要点内容,对电影内容的介绍把握得很好,简明扼要。个人感想段落,也表现了不俗的思辩能力,逻辑合理,由浅入深,体现了思维层次的渐进。同时在表达方式上,用到了一些复合句式结构,如定语从句(who was also unluckily born with a serious back problem.)等。同时,作者也有意识地使用了一些高级词汇和句子间的连接词,例如achieve, bear ... in heart, instead等等。此外,文章的句型结构很丰富,体现了句型的多样性。
powerful sentences:
1. the film describes his life as he lives through important times in american history from a very unique angle.
2. the film advocates a traditional moral idea.
3. the actor’s naturally sincere performance makes you believe that the film is real.萝的拼音
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