读后续写原题目:
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
首段抛却“升华主旨”,是简单的背景介绍和引入:
For years, my wife Teresa taught physical education at the elementary school level. Travelling on(这里的travel很地道。再拓展一个词travel on business出差) a regular schedule to the six schools in her district, she had a chance to get to know most of the kids in the area and see them at their best and their worst.(协同点:下文可写我的妻子看到了女孩
多年来,我的妻子特蕾莎在小学教体育课。她定期去她所在地区的六所学校,有机会了解这个地区的大多数孩子,看到他们最好和最差的一面。
第二段交代了小女孩的情况:简单来说,就是矮,胖,衰,孤独。协同点:下文可写她有了小狗后的改变(注意:这里的改变不能超出原来的人物设定,比如:她后来成了人见人爱的社牛。
这种改变是随时间流逝缓缓抚平的,如,她开始和小狗分享学校的事物,渐渐开心起来,慢慢长高了,显得与之前瘦了不少……)
One day, in her class, Teresa noticed a third-grade girl, Meagan, who was short and grossly(严重地) overweight, with a closed and hopeless look on her face. Meagan always sat alone in class, played alone at break, and ate alone from a recycled paper sack at lunch. The teachers and staff were kind to Meagan, but the students were not.
有一天,在她的课堂上,特蕾莎注意到一个叫梅根的三年级女孩,她身材矮小,体重严重超标,脸上带着一种封闭而绝望的表情。梅根在课堂上总是一个人坐着,休息时一个人玩,午餐时一个人从回收纸袋里拿东西吃。老师和工作人员对梅根很好,但学生们却不是。
具体的举例:她如何受其它孩子欺负(甚至校园霸凌bully)以及她的家庭情况(在后文当然可以有照应)
The stories made your shoulders drop. Teresa heard that when the playground super
visors(管理员)turned their backs, kids would run up to Meagan, calling her "Meagan the Fat Pig."They did far worse than isolate (孤立)her;they filled her school days and walks home with physical and emotional torment (折磨).
关于折磨这一词,还想请大家背下这一句话,来日续写可能用上:
With that weather-beaten figure staggering to very clearness in his mind,he felt deep soul constantly tortured by an invisible hammer of morality, simultaneously choking out, “We must help him!”
Also, Meagan's single mother,a hard-working woman, was trying her best to make ends meet(完形填空可以出哦) but she had never made it before.
那些故事让你垂头丧气。特蕾莎听说,当操场管理者转过身去的时候,孩子们就会跑到梅根跟前,叫她“胖猪梅根”。他们所做的远比孤立她更糟糕;他们让她上学的日子和回家的路上充满了身体和精神上的折磨。此外,梅根的单身母亲,一个勤劳的女人,尽她最大的努力使收支平衡,但她从来没有做到过。
我妻子的想法:养小狗,引出部分主题(inject high-powered love去取代low-spirit的Meagan)
Meagan' s situation disturbed my wife deeply. After talking with the principle and other teachers, Teresa came up with an idea. She knew from talking to Meagan that the child had never had a pet. Teresa was sure a pet would be the perfect way to inject some high-powered love and acceptance into Meagan's life.
梅根的处境使我妻子深感不安。在与校长和其他老师交谈后,特蕾莎想出了一个主意。她从和梅根的谈话中得知,这个孩子从来没有养过宠物。特蕾莎确信,宠物将是给梅根的生活注入一些强大的爱和接纳的完美方式。
顺其自然地领走了狗狗:So one Saturday afternoon, Meagan was invited to Teresa's office. she合体为ella庆生When the door buzzer sounded, a dog engaged in a predictable and vigorous welcome. Getting down on one knee, Teresa introduced herself to Meagan.She told Meagan her thought that she could take away a puppy if she liked. Like any creature that has been cared about, Meagan gleamed in her eyes and playfully lifted the pupp
y almost off the ground. That day Meagan left the office with the puppy.(这一段显然在她的发言中可以有很多用得上。比如回忆获得狗狗的那一天I would never forget about the day that……)
于是,一个星期六的下午,梅根被邀请到特蕾莎的办公室。门铃响了,一只狗不出所料地热烈欢迎了她。特蕾莎单膝跪地,向梅根作了自我介绍。她告诉梅根她的想法,如果她愿意,她可以带走一只小狗。就像所有被关心过的动物一样,梅根的眼睛里闪烁着光芒,顽皮地把小狗抱离地面。那天,梅根带着小狗离开了办公室。
注意:
1.续写词数应为150左右;2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: Now she had a living, breathing friend who wanted to play with her.
现在她有了一个活泼(应该翻译为“活生生”,但感觉怪怪的)的朋友,想和她一起玩。
Paragraph 2: Ten years later, Teresa received an invitation to the high school graduation ceremony."rom Meagan,where Meagan made a speech.
十年后,(十年跨度,从三年级大概9岁到将近20岁光景)特蕾莎收到了梅根寄来的参加高中毕业典礼的邀请,梅根在毕业典礼上发表了演讲。
范文解析:
Now she had a living, breathing friend who wanted to play with her. The cute puppy loved to cuddle up next to her on the sofa and sleep next her on the bed. When Meagan came home from school, the puppy would rush to the door, and follow her from room to room through the house. They became close ones, being together whenever and wherever possible. Energized by the puppy's unconditional love,limitless affection and loyalty, Meagan began to blossom(比拟手法,用在这里恰到好处). She did find fellow pet lovers who befriended her, and things began to improve for her physically, emotionally, and socially.(笼统写,回应前文女孩糟糕的状态)
现在她有了一个活生生的朋友,想和她一起玩。这只可爱的小狗喜欢在沙发上依偎在她身边,在床上挨着她睡觉。当梅根放学回家时,这只小狗会冲到门口,跟着她从一个房间到另一个房间。他们成了亲密的朋友,无论何时何地,只要有可能,他们都会在一起。在小狗无
条件的爱、无限的爱和忠诚的激励下,梅根开始绽放。她确实到了爱宠物的人,他们都和她成为朋友,她的身体、情感和社交状况开始好转。
Ten years later, Teresa received an invitation to the high school graduation ceremony from Meagan, where Meagan made a speech. When Meagan strode to the platform, head high and beaming,Teresa hardly recognized her.(紧扣主要人物:我妻子(女孩的帮助者)的反应。) She gave a speech on the importance of acceptance and friendship. She talked about the puppy and the great teacher she'd met in the third grade who had helped her climb the steep and treacherous slope of her childhood. It was the puppy who (强调句型)had comforted her when there wasn't enough to eat in the house and who had stayed by her while she sobbed her heart out. At the conclusion of the speech, Meagan lifted her hands high, displaying a photograph of the puppy, saying, Thank you,puppy, my close friend. Thank you, Teresa, my great teacher!"As she described, the crowd rose to their feet with cheers, laughter, and long, thunderous applause.
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