高二英语读后续写（5.21）
一、阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
At first, Surrell didn't see the black smoke or flames shooting from the windows of his neighbors' home. He and his wife were just having a dinner in their own house in Allentown, Pennsylvania, when they heard someone screaming, “The house is on fire!” He went to investigate. That's when he saw two women and a girl crazily at a loss on their porch (走廊). It was his neighbor's house.
    “The baby's inside there!” one of the women cried. Though the fire department had been called,Surrell, then 64, instinctively(本能地) ran inside. “The baby” was 8-year-old Tiara关于消防的知识 Roberts, who always called him Uncle  Surrell. She was the woman's granddaughter and a playmate of Surrell's three youngest kids, 8, 10, and 12. The other two on the porch were Tiara's aunt and cousin.
如何游泳    Entering the burning house was like running into “a bucket of black paint”. The thick sm
oke caused Surrell to walk blindly around, burned  his eyes, and made it impossible for him to breathe. He felt his throat and lungs  burned, and every blink stung(蛰) his eyes. The conditions would have been very  dangerous  for anyone, but  for Surrell, who has chronic obstructive pulmonary disease(慢性阻塞性肺病) and was in hospital just half a year ago, they were life-risking.
    After a few minutes in the smoke-filled house searching but in vain, he ran outside to catch his breath. “Where is Tiara?” he asked desperately. 
    “The second floor回族有哪些节日,” her aunt shouted back.
    Surrell knew he couldn't hold his breath for long. So he uttered a little prayer, “Well, God, this is it. You got to help me, because I'm not coming out without that little girl.”
    注意：
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150词左右；
2. 应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph 1:
Taking a deep health, he went in a second time.____________________________________
Paragraph 2:
Surrell woke up in the hospital a couple of days later. _______________________________
【写作思路与分析】
此题要求根据短文的情节，结合所提供的关键词语以及所续写段落的开头语来进行续写。短文续写可以遵循以下步骤： 
  我的校园作文400字（一）文本分析
  本文叙述了Surrell不顾自己年老体弱，奋不顾身地冲进火海救护邻居小孩Tiara的故事。在阅读文本时，我们要带着when (having a dinner)、where (Surrell's neighbor's home, the second floor, hospital)、who (Surrell, Tiara, Tiara's Grandmother and Tiara's relatives)、what (Fire broke out and Tiara was trapped on the second floor)、why (The house was on fire and the house was full of heavy smoke, Tiara's grandmother and her relatives were crazily at a loss)、how (Surrell dashed into the burning house to save Tiara)去理清文本的内容和故事情节的发展脉络。对于故事的进展，我们要聚焦how (故事情节的发展和故事人物的情感变化)。在梳理故事情节发展的脉络时，我们要把握住三条线索：时空线、故事情节线和情感发展线。
  时空线：at first having a dinner, Tiara's grandmother's house on fire, the second floor, hospital。
  故事情节线：①Surrell在家与妻子一起吃饭时，听到邻居因家里失火而发出的尖叫声。②Tiara的奶奶、姑姑和表(妹)站在家里的走廊上因害怕而不知所措。③Surrell不顾自己年老体弱（患有慢性阻塞性肺病），奋不顾身地冲进火海营救深陷火海地Tiara。④Tiara被
成功营救了吗？Surrell和Tiara被烧伤了吗？Surrell在医院苏醒后康复得怎样？邻居们对他的英勇行为又是怎么评价？这些信息和内容是我们在下文续写中要交待的。
  情感发展线：Tiara奶奶和亲戚们对房子起火惊吓得手足无措，Surrell得知情况后奋不顾身地去救护Tiara，从没有救出Tiara时的焦躁和救出之后躺在医院的坦然。
  在这一环节，我们要聚焦原作者在文本中所使用人物的肢体语言、心理活动和脸部表情来描写人物的情感，表达人物的思想。我们尽可能仿效作者的写作的格调，遵循读后续写的协同原则来完成自己的故事续写。 
（二）下划线词和续写首句解读
1. 下划线词的解读
相组词已知文本中的10个下划线词为：Surrell, Tiara, uncle, smoke, burned, lungs, dangerous, hospital, outside, the second floor。根据这10个下划线的词，我们可以进行粗略地分类，然后进行详细地分析：
Characters 人物类
Surrell, Tiara
Time and places时空类
hospital, outside, the second floor
Plot development故事情节发展类
uncle, smoke, burned, lungs, dangerous
①人物类中的“Surrell与Tiara”是本文主人公。故事情节的发展自始至终都是围绕着作者“Surrell”与Tiara之间展开，所以Surrell, Tiara都是必选词汇。Surrell与Tiara是邻居，Surrell对可爱、礼貌、乖巧的Tiara很是喜欢，于是不顾一切地冲进火海救护Tiara。Surrell在救护中受伤，Tiara和她的家人心存感恩，在医院一直守护Surrell，一直到他苏醒。这故事情节反映了邻里之间互爱互助，关系和谐的社区生活。
②时空类中的hospital, outside和the second floor是故事情节发展至高潮的必需地点。Surrell冲进火海，将Tiara抱出外面，可他自己却受伤送进医院抢救。因此，hospital, outside和the second floor在续写故事中都可以定为必选词汇。
③故事情节发展类中的uncle, smoke, burned, lungs, dangerous都是故事情节的发展与推进词汇，uncle称谓体现了Surrell与Tiara 之间的亲密关系，smoke增添了Surrell救护Tiara的难度，burned交代了Surrell在救护中可能被烧伤某一人体部位，lungs是Surrell救护Tiara前身体不适部位，而他却在身体不适的情况下义无反顾地冲进火海救护Tina，体现了他的无畏和勇敢，dangerous是当时救护时的处境，但故事的发展可以通过其他形式的渲染，而不必直接点出危险的处境。因此，下划线uncle, smoke, burned, lungs等词都可以定为续写的必选或可选词汇。
    2. 首句的解读
    从续写第二段首句Surrell woke up in the hospital a couple of days later.可知，Surrell在救护Tiara过程中受伤住院了，结合续写第一段首句“Taking a deep health, he went in a second time.的提示，我们可以推断出，Surrell第一次冲进火海并没有将Tiara营救出来。他第二次营救是否会成功？ Surrell受伤严重吗？Tiara烧伤了没有？Surrell受伤后大家会有什么反应呢？实施急救还是送往医院？这些内容都是我们需要在第一段续写中要交代的。